I think not very soon. I think one of these days I will post a topic with progress. But in short, the fourth game day has already been written in half (since the division will be into 2 completely different days, depending on the choice of the companion). Made 2 new characters (but without emotions), another one is required. Made a new background and new music. But one more background is required. And there will also be a delay due to the translation of the text, but after writing the second half to the end)
I spent a lot of time animation the game characters, but trying to implement them into the game was not successful. Perhaps it will work out in the future.
The quick time event in which you have to save the fox from the fire unfortunately forced me to quit due to there being too many hits you have to land and no where near enough time to click them. I hope in a future update this problem will be resolved.
Nice game, I'm waiting for continuing. Gunn is pretty hot, I hope it will possible to date with him and choose your role by yourself, so pleeeeeaseeeeee :33
Doesnt Work Keyboard is still bugged . When i click top enter my Name then everything works fine. But.... I cant Close it again and i cant start the game
thx to be unkind to me. I guess I have more talent at mobiles then u dude. That's what i have to do at work . Fixing phones hardware and software. And still I have to report this bug. So nothing wrong with my comment
When the fist is on one side you have to press the arrow on the side the fist is on (fist on the left, press left, fist on the right, press right). If the fist points towards you, press up. If it points up, press down.
You can use the cursor keys for this (it makes it so much easier).
BTW. This one baffled me for a while before I figured it out and I still find it rather confusing.
Wow, really interesting so far! I'm really enjoying what's going on. However, whenever I launch the game, the text speed resets to a default speed, which is pretty slow, so I have to change the text speed whenever I launch. Anyone else experiencing this?
Great game, if you like typing. Couldn't get farther than the name editor on android. All those megabytes are worthless if I can't do anything but type in the name slot. Can't even hit enter, nothing happens.
Воу! Мне приятно видеть очередную игру с русским языком (не нужно напрягать свой мозг по поводу понятия смысла и т.д.). К тому же повествование ведется интересно и даже интригующе, однако я не мог не пройти мимо нескольких ошибок, которые врезались мне в глаза и не дают покоя. Сразу хочу сказать: я могу высказываться, как вам может показаться, грубо, но я всего лишь хочу не видеть этих ошибок... и да, заранее прошу прощения.
Итак, начинаем. Первая ошибка, которая меня покорёбила - это "по-серьезнее". Правильным будет написание "посерьезнее" поскольку, постольку это наречие пишется без суффикса ому (ему) (если они есть и есть приставка "по", то да, мы пишем приставку через дефис, например: по-одному, по-простому).
Второй момент - это лишняя запятая в предложении, оканчивающееся так: "... и лишь я да лучи солнца видят меня в этом состоянии". У вас между местоимением "я" и союзом "да" (который используется в значении "и") стоит запятая, являющаяся определенно лишней. Надеюсь, не стоит объяснять, почему она лишняя... да? :)
В-третьих, в предложении "Весь цикл порядка "Убей-умри" я наблюдал, начиная с завтрашнего дня и заканчивая сегодняшним" я нашел сразу две ошибки: первая - вы не поставили запятую перед начала деепричастного оборота ("начиная ..."); вторая - как можно начинать наблюдение завтра и заканчивать сегодня? О,о Это, честно, ввело меня в ступор.
Четвертый момент, который мне запомнился - лишняя запятая при перечислении действий в предложении, заканчивающемся так: "... нанести первый удар и попробовать сбежать". Если бы вы при перечислении использовали союз "и", относящийся к перечисляемым действиям, где-нибудь еще, то да, необходима была бы запятая. А так... она не нужна.
И, наконец, в-пятых, в предложении, в котором есть следующие слова: "... столов, коих тут было в избытке...", слово в "избытке" идет в разрез со смыслом всего предложения и вообще всей обстановки в трактире мистера Смитта. Дело в том, что слово "избыток" означает "много чего-либо", однако ГГ, проснувшись, обнаруживает, что у мистера Смитта полным-полно народу, и поэтому свободных столов в избытке быть не может. Вам стоит переделать это предложение, чтобы оно вписывалось во все повествование:)
Фууух... это вроде все. Надеюсь, что это было единственными ошибками, которые вы допустили с точки зрения русского языка :)
Еще раз скажу, что мне безумно понравилось как повествование, так и графическая составляющая. И надеюсь, что вы услышите мои слова и исправите ошибки:)
Try spamming the return button on your phone and then hold it, or just hold the return button and press other things with your other hand. Works for me.
No, new characters are not planned. Clothes and jewelry are possible. But for each new character, the work increases significantly. I have to draw a lot of heads with emotions (about 8) and three types of body for the head.
Not NPC characters I mean the starting character. The one you can some what customize. You gave multiple opinions for canine and feline and even a gorilla but nothing for us scalies.
i am interested in your games but i have to wait for your android version. but i have a question what is your native language and would you make a version of the games in that language?
Overall I think this VN has potential. Only real problem I see so far is the English. While the English is easy to interpret, the wording is very strange and needs work. Looking forward to what you can do with this VN!
Hey Good to see you making something new. It's kinda sad that B101 didn't make it. Anywho you got a good demo rightnow. Also There's a comunity discord server for furry vn, have you join yet ?
Really good start here! Love the character designs. The writing can be a bit purple prose-y at times, but not enough for me to have put the game down. May just want to tune that down a notch. Otherwise, it's a really good translation!
A few specific things that need a bit of tweaking:
At the beginning of the game, you have "Nevertheless, work whis Travis, a local freek..." I believe the words should be "with" and "freak". In the same block of text, there should be a comma after "bloodstained hands" and before the "and".
Soon after, you have the phrase "while I was disconnected after the blow". You may want to use unconscious instead, as it looks less weird in context. Disconnected typically is paired with words like "from reality"
You have the sentence "Stink, {besides clause}, was not. I would insert a "there" before the "was not" part. If you put the sentence in typical order, you would say "There was no stink", thus you still need that "there".
"I would definitely have discovered me" : replace with It
"yet it still pulls unpleasantly..." rest of the sentence is in past tense, so consider "pulled"
In the paragraph starting with "The strength of my paws", you suddenly switch from 1st to 3rd to 1st person. I would keep it consistent and replace "he's" and "his" with "I" and "my".
The next paragraph, you have "measured steps that were heard", switching to passive voice randomly. I would say "My immersion.....steps that I heard...."
"What if a gang buddy Tavriy comes here": It should be "of Tavriy's" as it shows possession/affiliation
I would end the phrase "There was no point in getting up" with a semicolon instead of a comma . Also replace "only" with "just"
The line "...and I could not even figure out the approximate outlines of my personality" feels out of place. Consider removing it or making it fit better in context.
What's with the <<eggs in a vise>> bit? Do you mean something like: "life in the wasteland teaches one to live like eggs in a vise; it is this skill...' ?
End the phrase "two meters from me" with a period instead of a comma. Also, change faces to face.
Exchange "Fate happened" with "Fate destined" or some equivalent.
Add a "the" between "to see" and "unknown guy" ; change "protecting from sand" to "protecting him from the sand"
Change "press me know" to "pin me now" or "hold me now" or some equivalent
I'm not sure what is meant by "and a knife seeker at my ass"
I would look again at the section of text beginning with "Would you eat, wash..." I kinda get what he's saying, but it needs to be much clearer.
YEEESSS!!!! I KNEW IT! I KNEW THAT YOU'RE COMING BACK!!! Btw, I'm a fan of B101 of yours but sadly there were no any update coming from the vn but now with this new vn I can continue admiring your art and supporting your vn even tho I'm broke :') *flies coming out from wallet*.... Anyway I really do love your artwork and I really do hope to see more of your artwork in the future. <3
Promising start for a new VN - Good art, interesting world and characters, maybe needs a little work on the translation but there's clearly a good story beneath it so it doesn't really matter to me.
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👍nice game, when is the full version coming?
I think not very soon. I think one of these days I will post a topic with progress. But in short, the fourth game day has already been written in half (since the division will be into 2 completely different days, depending on the choice of the companion). Made 2 new characters (but without emotions), another one is required. Made a new background and new music. But one more background is required. And there will also be a delay due to the translation of the text, but after writing the second half to the end)
I spent a lot of time animation the game characters, but trying to implement them into the game was not successful. Perhaps it will work out in the future.
wait why does this remind me of b101 a bit.
This is because i worked on the design b101 :) But the director and creator of the project is gone, I created my own.
aww i see, i love this one too though. keep up the good work !
Do you know what happened to him
Is he dead or missing 😢 ?
The quick time event in which you have to save the fox from the fire unfortunately forced me to quit due to there being too many hits you have to land and no where near enough time to click them. I hope in a future update this problem will be resolved.
Успехов))
there are cg´s on the game?
Привет! Молодец хорошая игра Спасибо!!! Обещаю поддерживать регулярно!!!
wtf is the English
I agree, the random Shakespearean english feels kinda forced, but it doesn't annoy me much
"A representative of his species enters my vision" lol
Nice game, I'm waiting for continuing. Gunn is pretty hot, I hope it will possible to date with him and choose your role by yourself, so pleeeeeaseeeeee :33
Doesnt Work Keyboard is still bugged . When i click top enter my Name then everything works fine. But.... I cant Close it again and i cant start the game
This is not possible, the error must be fixed. Just click on the window with the name and it will disappear, then click start.
Most likely, you have not assigned talents. Therefore, the start button is blocked.
thx to be unkind to me. I guess I have more talent at mobiles then u dude. That's what i have to do at work . Fixing phones hardware and software. And still I have to report this bug. So nothing wrong with my comment
This was a very short update
does the game have NSFW scenes ? and if you don't have any plan to insert?
There is one that I know of. But that is all so far
Good luck with the translation :З
Dead? Like the other game?
A shame if it is cause both games where great
nope, an update just happened
🤦🏽♂️"Sigh" Emm... Hroft32 what about New I just wait this New Update is Long time I Want to See This Bull storyline but lt Has Passed 90 Days 😓
When will it get updated? It's more then a month ago. And the android version doesn't work at the start (character create)
I'm using android as well, you gotta change the keyboard type in the keyboard settings.
I did before. But still thx. I just reported the bug
I downloaded the game on android. The keyboard keeps popping up at the character design screen. I couldn't customise my character
Same here :(
When is this going to be updated?
The update will be in a week, or monday, but there isn't much new text. About 12 pages
Unfortunately, the update will be postponed for some time. The text is finished. But I do not expect that the translation will take some time.
Вау, многообещающе начало! Буду следить за игрой. Удачи сценаристам и остальным членам команды ^^
Очень рад, что русский поддерживается, спасибо :з
So, the mini-game/incident with the hyena, how do you play that one?
When the fist is on one side you have to press the arrow on the side the fist is on (fist on the left, press left, fist on the right, press right). If the fist points towards you, press up. If it points up, press down.
You can use the cursor keys for this (it makes it so much easier).
BTW. This one baffled me for a while before I figured it out and I still find it rather confusing.
Thanks a lot, I'm sure many found this to be a big help. I don't think I would have had the patience to figure it. Dx
I can't get past typing my name on my android phone. Please help!
Android Version don't work. I can't start and make my characters. My keyboard opens to type my name... But u can't close it again.... Please fix
ohhh... ohhh! look at that hot daddys... grrrrr.... cant wait to play it
Huh??? no new.....😑
Wow, really interesting so far! I'm really enjoying what's going on. However, whenever I launch the game, the text speed resets to a default speed, which is pretty slow, so I have to change the text speed whenever I launch. Anyone else experiencing this?
Great game, if you like typing. Couldn't get farther than the name editor on android. All those megabytes are worthless if I can't do anything but type in the name slot. Can't even hit enter, nothing happens.
This is replacement for B101.
Not really... the writers are different. But I hope that it will turn out no worse and the case will be brought to an end ^_^
Yeah i hope so.. good luck with the work and ur art have improved a lot.
Воу! Мне приятно видеть очередную игру с русским языком (не нужно напрягать свой мозг по поводу понятия смысла и т.д.). К тому же повествование ведется интересно и даже интригующе, однако я не мог не пройти мимо нескольких ошибок, которые врезались мне в глаза и не дают покоя. Сразу хочу сказать: я могу высказываться, как вам может показаться, грубо, но я всего лишь хочу не видеть этих ошибок... и да, заранее прошу прощения.
Итак, начинаем. Первая ошибка, которая меня покорёбила - это "по-серьезнее". Правильным будет написание "посерьезнее" поскольку, постольку это наречие пишется без суффикса ому (ему) (если они есть и есть приставка "по", то да, мы пишем приставку через дефис, например: по-одному, по-простому).
Второй момент - это лишняя запятая в предложении, оканчивающееся так: "... и лишь я да лучи солнца видят меня в этом состоянии". У вас между местоимением "я" и союзом "да" (который используется в значении "и") стоит запятая, являющаяся определенно лишней. Надеюсь, не стоит объяснять, почему она лишняя... да? :)
В-третьих, в предложении "Весь цикл порядка "Убей-умри" я наблюдал, начиная с завтрашнего дня и заканчивая сегодняшним" я нашел сразу две ошибки: первая - вы не поставили запятую перед начала деепричастного оборота ("начиная ..."); вторая - как можно начинать наблюдение завтра и заканчивать сегодня? О,о Это, честно, ввело меня в ступор.
Четвертый момент, который мне запомнился - лишняя запятая при перечислении действий в предложении, заканчивающемся так: "... нанести первый удар и попробовать сбежать". Если бы вы при перечислении использовали союз "и", относящийся к перечисляемым действиям, где-нибудь еще, то да, необходима была бы запятая. А так... она не нужна.
И, наконец, в-пятых, в предложении, в котором есть следующие слова: "... столов, коих тут было в избытке...", слово в "избытке" идет в разрез со смыслом всего предложения и вообще всей обстановки в трактире мистера Смитта. Дело в том, что слово "избыток" означает "много чего-либо", однако ГГ, проснувшись, обнаруживает, что у мистера Смитта полным-полно народу, и поэтому свободных столов в избытке быть не может. Вам стоит переделать это предложение, чтобы оно вписывалось во все повествование:)
Фууух... это вроде все. Надеюсь, что это было единственными ошибками, которые вы допустили с точки зрения русского языка :)
Еще раз скажу, что мне безумно понравилось как повествование, так и графическая составляющая. И надеюсь, что вы услышите мои слова и исправите ошибки:)
Спасибо за игру!:D
The keyboard gets in the way on the Android version. Is there any way you can fix that
Try spamming the return button on your phone and then hold it, or just hold the return button and press other things with your other hand. Works for me.
Just change the keyboard mode to floating and you can move it out of the way
I actually forgot about that lol
how do you do that though. I'm having the same problem and haven't been able to play.
As example I can't enable the floating mode. Cause it's disabled in this game.
any chance you will add more options for the character creator. I would love a reptile of some kind. aside from that so far its pretty good.
No, new characters are not planned. Clothes and jewelry are possible. But for each new character, the work increases significantly. I have to draw a lot of heads with emotions (about 8) and three types of body for the head.
Not NPC characters I mean the starting character. The one you can some what customize. You gave multiple opinions for canine and feline and even a gorilla but nothing for us scalies.
Приятно видеть отечественную новеллу) Кстати, будет ли страничка на Патреоне? Я с радостью поддержал бы проект.
Ого не думал встретить русский комент)
:)
will you make a french version ?
This is possible if there is a translator
i am interested in your games but i have to wait for your android version. but i have a question what is your native language and would you make a version of the games in that language?
Yes, the original language is Russian, the language in the game is switched
Overall I think this VN has potential. Only real problem I see so far is the English. While the English is easy to interpret, the wording is very strange and needs work. Looking forward to what you can do with this VN!
Android?
I will try to do it in the next month, there is an opportunity, tests are needed.
I hope everything goes well ^-^
Everything has already been done, presumably on Sunday everything will be in the public domain.
i was worried after b101 became quiet, glad to see you're doing alright! love the new game ^.^
HROFT IS BACKKKKK!!!!!!!
Hey Good to see you making something new. It's kinda sad that B101 didn't make it. Anywho you got a good demo rightnow. Also There's a comunity discord server for furry vn, have you join yet ?
no, haven't heard
Would you like to join ? Dev and reader are there if you want to here feedback more regularly. And you can ask other dev for help if you like!
I'm too antisocial, I'm afraid that I'll just read and be silent :)
It's ok to lurk too. I'll just leave the link here if you ever want to join https://discord.gg/GFjSPkh
Really good start here! Love the character designs. The writing can be a bit purple prose-y at times, but not enough for me to have put the game down. May just want to tune that down a notch. Otherwise, it's a really good translation!
A few specific things that need a bit of tweaking:
-----Will add more as I read---
Thank you very much for your feedback. I will fix it in the next update.
Wait...is this from the same creator of B101 vn?
Yes, I'm a drawing artist at b101
YEEESSS!!!! I KNEW IT! I KNEW THAT YOU'RE COMING BACK!!! Btw, I'm a fan of B101 of yours but sadly there were no any update coming from the vn but now with this new vn I can continue admiring your art and supporting your vn even tho I'm broke :') *flies coming out from wallet*.... Anyway I really do love your artwork and I really do hope to see more of your artwork in the future. <3
Thank you so much ;)
Promising start for a new VN - Good art, interesting world and characters, maybe needs a little work on the translation but there's clearly a good story beneath it so it doesn't really matter to me.